Spearpoint a down-on-his-luck stallion was a terrible royal guard who could barely perform his duties. However, he is given the opportunity to be on Celestia's cleaning staff as one of her maids. But...she secretly starts to turn other rude and lazy royal guards into maids as well. Spearpoint now known as Mop Head rises through the ranks to become the head maid of the transformed stallions and helps them get used to their new lives (and some start to enjoy being mares). But Mop Head has to also find a way to stop Celestia's madness...
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Chapters (10)
Oh, another one based on these images? Will give it a read and get back to you.
I'm getting a strange feeling that while this is a Celestia story, I'm getting major Molestia vibes... and that kinda worries me.
So I'm gonna keep reading.
Is this going to be something similar to Nido_King's "Demoted" series?
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Nido_King has his own series called Demoted based on these.
p.s. why isN'T there any Sex tag ?
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In a sense yes...but Im going more for a personal touch
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Ahh gotcha
Luna: Is this how you recruit your personal maids, sister? I always have suspicion why somepony called them the 'Battle Maids' unit.
This is amazingly well-written I can't wait to see what you do for chapter 2
Maybe I'm being unfair, but the Equestrian Royal Guard would probably be more useful as a Maid Brigade.
They don't appear to be very successful at their current job.
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https://www.fimfiction.net/story/449063/demoted
Hope you enjoy it.
My, isn't this quite the bundle of intrigue.
It's funny seeing these kinds of story. Really fun read.
Nice seeing a update for this story.
Nice to see this story is still continuing. Too bad the new maid in this chapter has no honor.
To quote DWK, "Celestia is Equestria's Mom; she's been around the longest, she knows the most, and -even if it seems like she's full of it sometimes- you should* probably just listen to her.
And also like Mom, you really don't want to tick her off.
What. A bitch.
You were warned.
Well, that was simply stupid. Couldn't just have waited till you are out of hearring range, right?
Don't complain, be happy that you got that chance at all, some would just have dismissed you.
Unintentional revenge is best revenge. Lol
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I'm rather surprised that Celestia let that old mare boss Mop Head around so cruelly without saying anything.
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True that.
I see a promotion for mop head and maybe Amber's attitude turns around
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Lol are you Pinkie Pie? Do you have pinkie sense? XD.
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I took a wild guess
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Sorry you basiclly read my mind. Good guess
Guards are little more than furniture in the palace. Making them maids actually could be seen as increasing their productive value to society.
And she comes back as a stallion. Lol
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Honestly that would be funny
I am waiting the reaction of Shining & Cadance when they hear about this shenanigan in Canterlot. Maybe the former Captain of the Guard might have some stories to tell?
Well, she's about a third right.
To be fair, you were kind of an a-hole before.
Ooh! Does anypony have some aloe vera on hoof? I sense a burn victim!
Bet you can't say that five times really fast.
10 bits that her name is-
Called it!
"'Made in Canterlot.'"
Other side.
"Oh."
To be fair, by all appearances, most of the royal guard spend most of their time standing around and gathering dust anyway.
Inb4 Dusty gets the UNO reverse card and has to be a guard for a week due to how she did Mop
This is a good start, but there's some grammar and possibly spelling that needs fixing here and there.
*shakes head and sighs*
Will this be continued?
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Eventually just got done with school so Ill have more time to devote to writing for the next few months.
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Okay, I can't wait to see more.
The maids who was a former royal guards? By all accounts, you couldn't name them anything but the battle maids - no matter how incompetent they were.
That's redundant.
Ah, hiding in plain sight.
You might want to wath your spelling continuity, there.
I'm not sure what reference to put here. I think... Both!
She could get some of her maids some combat training. It's called a plainclothes guard. And who would be less suspicious than one of the maids?
Yes, yes. Honey is packed with antioxidants, improves mental activity and as a bonus helps with sore throat and coughs, to name a few things. Ginger helps fight off a myriad of illnesses like high blood presure, heart and lung disease et cetera, and aids with helthy aging, again, just to name a few things.
The story is good, but you need an editor. So many mistakes could have been avoided if you had someone helping you out. Like this:
This should be two words, not one. "A bit." This mistake is in the chapter multiple times.
I would suggest posting a request for help here:
https://www.fimfiction.net/group/97/looking-for-editors
Damn, this is surprisingly engaging and has me tearing through chapter after chapter wanting more!