• Published 22nd Oct 2023
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Baltimare's Haunted House of "Apparitions" - Ollerus



Moving from his hometown, Hollow Shades, he’s come to Baltimare to spread his appreciation of the creepy. It’s Nightmare Night, and it’s his grand opening! But everything changed when a transparent pony showed up.

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4. So, Why "Apparitions" ❓

Beyond the confines of that stuffy werewolf costume, I was still dressed in my favorite, comfortable attire. My face completely exposed, I proudly displayed my sharp tooth, which was peeking out of my mouth, as I donned a purple cape and a deep navy blue top hat with a purple band. From the roof of my haunted house, I laid sprawled out on my back atop said cape, my mint-green irises fixated on the vast expanse of the dark night sky – and my half-white mask lying beside me. Here and there, a few stars shimmered like distant diamonds, tempting me to count a thorough tally. There was a serene silence up here, broken only by the occasional clops in the distance and the constant chirping of crickets. “Haah…” I sighed a breath of relief.

Beside me, my newfound partner and friend floated gently about three inches off the ceiling. An actual apparition. A ghost pony. Like me, she too looked up at the black night sky. And just in case, we had the white blanket ghost costume at the ready. “Hey, Hollow Shack. There’s something I’ve been wondering.”

Banafrit shot me a question, and I would always be open to answer. “Ask away.”

“With no prior knowledge of spirits and such, what’s the reason behind your self-proclaimed title, the 'Pony of Apparitions'? Even the building…”

“It… just sounded right.”

“Anything closely related to a pony’s purpose to get their cutie mark gives off a distinct feeling, right?”

“I’m not sure, maybe. The memory of the day my cutie mark was bestowed upon me by scaring my mother is a pleasure I will never forget. That spirit would always linger when I thought about doing it to another pony, and the next, and the next… Even planning how to was enough.”

“So then... do you think apparitions are a part of that?” she asked, her voice filled with curiosity.

I tore my eyes away from the black sky, with its occasional passing cloud, and shifted my head horizontally towards Banafrit. Following her dull-colored eyes, I couldn't help but feel a sense of emptiness (Not because she was a transparent ghost). I shifted my gaze in the opposite direction, released a soft breath through my nose, and muttered a reply. “What are you saying, Banafrit? I’m Hollow Shack, the Pony of Apparitions. I think we both know the answer to that.”

Soon after, we both heard voices in the distance. “Look! A haunted house is over here.”

“You want to check it out, babe?”

“Yeah!”

“I’ll just knock on the door and see if they answer.”

Sounded like a grown mare and stallion. A couple at that. With a burst of excitement, I grabbed my white half-mask and propelled myself into the air, my cape swirling in harmony. “Look’s like my cat will starve tonight.”

“…What?” Banafrit said with a blank expression.

“It’s Nightmare Night! We couldn't possibly close up shop when we have chance encounters like this. Since they’re adults, I’ll handle this on my own. However, if things go downhill, I’m depending on you to give our customers the scare of a lifetime.” I galloped down the roof and jumped into the nearest window, leaving Banafrit behind. No need to worry about how she gets inside. She was a ghost, after all. She would just phase through with no problems. “Once again, it’s showbiz time!”


I watched Hollow Shack leap through a window, his hoofsteps echoing loudly as he sprinted to the front of his store with urgency. “I’m just going to leave this ghost costume behind.”

Phasing through the roof to the ceiling of the first floor, I had a rush of excitement as Hollow Shack swung open the door, waved his cape, and welcomed the new customers. “The name’s Hollowwwww Shack! I’d like to welcome you to Baltimare’s Haunted House of Pony Apparitions!”

As the mare clopped her hooves together in interest, a sense of joy washed over me. I couldn’t help but smile.

Author's Note:

This is officially my first published and completed fanfic. Though there is potential for more stories with these characters, for now, I have no plans for it. I wrote this mostly for fun (technically in general, I write for fun) and for Halloween (Nightmare Night). Also written in two days, hopefully, my writing style wasn't too rough.

Let's take a quick look at the characters, shall we?

— Shining Ember is a pony scared of everything.

— Jade Rain is a filly putting up with the crap that comes her way, not letting anything get her down for a good time.

— Vampy is a pet cat trying her best to live a life of luxury.

— Banafrit is a laid-back mysterious ghost pony looking for a place to belong.

— Our protagonist, Hollow Shack, is a fellow enraptured by all that is creepy. A unicorn stallion not afraid of following his dream, even if it meant living his life on the streets.

As I’ve mentioned before, this is a small spin-off for another series I’m writing. The story takes place around the same time period, within the same universe. Who knows... maybe a certain pony of apparitions will make an appearance?

Anyway, if you've made it this far, I'd like to express my humble thanks for reading my first published fanfic and fimfic. Of course, any likes and favorites are appreciated. Have a nice day and or Nightmare Night!

Comments ( 2 )

Cute little story, I like it!

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Thanks, glad you enjoyed it! Maybe you'll like my next fic, though it'll be much longer.

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